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Question 1
Jamal is drafting an informative report about hurricanes. He made a quick draft without planning, and his paragraphs jump between topics:
Draft paragraph order:
- “Hurricanes can cause flooding and power outages.”
- “A hurricane forms over warm ocean water.”
- “People should keep flashlights and bottled water.”
- “Meteorologists measure wind speed to rate hurricanes.”
Jamal decides to revise for organization so the report is easier to follow. What revision would best strengthen the organization?
- Reorder the paragraphs to explain formation first, then measurement, then effects, then safety tips. (correct answer)
- Underline the most important sentence in each paragraph and keep the order the same.
- Replace the word “hurricane” with “storm” in every paragraph to avoid repetition.
- Add three exclamation points to the safety paragraph to make it more exciting.
Explanation: This question tests W.7.5—develop and strengthen writing through planning, revising, editing, rewriting, trying new approach. Writing process STRENGTHENS through: PLANNING (before drafting: brainstorm, outline, graphic organizer, list evidence/details, clarify purpose/audience—organization clearer, sufficient support, focused, appropriate to task), REVISING (big picture content/organization/clarity: add evidence/details/examples, reorder for logic, group related info, add transitions, replace vague with precise, cut tangents, connect ideas, focus—makes writing stronger/clearer/more coherent), EDITING (sentence-level conventions: correct grammar, fix punctuation/spelling, vary sentences, tighten language—polishes and improves readability), REWRITING (start over when needed—completely reorganize, new focus, appropriate structure). Jamal's draft jumps illogically between effects, formation, safety, and measurement—revising for organization means reordering content to follow a logical sequence that readers can follow easily. Choice A correctly suggests reordering paragraphs from formation to measurement to effects to safety tips, creating a logical flow from how hurricanes form to their impact to how to prepare. Choice B (underlining) doesn't fix the organizational problem, C focuses on word choice not structure, and D suggests superficial editing rather than meaningful revision. Teachers should model how to identify logical sequences in informational writing, use graphic organizers to plan before drafting, and teach students to revise for coherent organization that guides readers through complex topics.
Question 2
Sofia wrote a personal narrative about her first day on the basketball team. Her teacher’s comment says: “Your events jump around. I can’t tell what happened first, and some details repeat.” Sofia wants to revise (not just edit) to address this feedback. Which revision would best strengthen her narrative?
- Reorder the events in chronological order and cut repeated moments while adding transitions like “Later that afternoon.” (correct answer)
- Fix the spelling errors and add commas to a few long sentences, keeping the current order because the writing already flows well.
- Add three vivid paragraphs describing new practices and games from later in the season to make the narrative feel more exciting.
- Move the ending to the beginning as a flashback so readers meet the exciting moments first before the ordinary details.
Explanation: The teacher points out two big-picture problems: the events are out of order and some details repeat. Fixing those means revising the content and organization, not just polishing words. Reordering the events chronologically, cutting the repeated moments, and adding time transitions like “Later that afternoon” directly solves both problems and makes the story easy to follow. Fixing spelling and commas only cleans up the surface; it never touches the order or the repetition the teacher flagged, so the confusing timeline stays the same. Adding three paragraphs about new practices and games from later in the season piles on unrelated content, which pulls focus away from the first day and makes the jumping-around problem worse, not better. Moving the ending up as a flashback rearranges the events but still doesn’t create a clear order the reader can follow, and it does nothing about the repeated details—so it leaves the exact confusion the teacher described. Only the first choice fixes both the ordering and the repetition, which is what real revision does.
Question 3
Riley wrote a draft of a book review, but the structure is completely wrong for the assignment. The assignment requires: a short summary, then evaluation with at least two reasons, and a recommendation. Riley’s draft is a scene-by-scene retelling with no opinion until the last line: “It was good.” Reordering sentences won’t add the missing parts. What process step would best strengthen Riley’s writing?
- Rewrite using the required structure, keeping only a brief summary and adding clear evaluation reasons and a recommendation. (correct answer)
- Edit the draft for commas and spelling, because polishing the conventions is what the draft most needs before turning it in.
- Revise by adding transition words between the scenes, because smoother connections will supply the evaluation the assignment asks for.
- Trim the retelling down to the most exciting scenes, because a shorter plot summary will satisfy the review requirements on its own.
Explanation: The draft is missing whole sections the assignment demands: it retells scenes but never evaluates the book with reasons and never gives a recommendation. Because the fundamental structure is wrong, moving or polishing sentences can’t fix it. The best step is to rewrite using the required structure—keeping only a brief summary and adding clear evaluation reasons and a recommendation—so the review finally does what the assignment asks. Editing for commas and spelling only cleans up surface conventions; it can’t create the missing evaluation and recommendation, so it treats a big structural problem as a small one. Adding transition words between scenes might connect the retelling more smoothly, but connecting sentences is not the same as producing an opinion backed by reasons, so the required evaluation still wouldn’t exist. Trimming to the most exciting scenes just shortens the plot summary; a review needs judgment and a recommendation, not a shorter retelling. Only rewriting builds the parts the draft lacks.
Question 4
Emma is writing an argument essay about whether students should have homework on weekends. She wrote this first draft introduction:
Draft: “Homework is bad. Students have stuff to do. Weekends should be free. Teachers should stop giving it.”
Then Emma revised by identifying her audience (school board) and adding a clear claim and reasons:
Revised: “Our school should limit weekend homework because students need time for family responsibilities, rest, and long-term projects that build real-world skills.”
Which statement best explains how Emma’s revising strengthened her writing?
- It strengthened the writing by correcting the spelling and punctuation errors so the introduction read more smoothly for the audience.
- It strengthened the writing by adding a clearer claim and specific reasons aimed at the audience. (correct answer)
- It strengthened the writing by shortening several sentences and cutting extra words so the argument felt more direct.
- It strengthened the writing by keeping the original ideas but rearranging the sentences into a more logical order.
Explanation: Emma changed her writing at the level of content and meaning, not just polish. Her first draft made vague complaints, but her revision states a real claim ("limit weekend homework") and backs it with specific reasons—family responsibilities, rest, and long-term projects—chosen to convince the school board. Adding a clearer claim and specific reasons aimed at the audience is exactly this kind of meaning-level revising, so that answer is correct. Correcting spelling and punctuation describes editing, which polishes surface conventions but never adds the claim or reasons the draft was missing. Shortening sentences and cutting extra words is also editing for tightness; Emma's revision actually got longer because she added ideas, not because she trimmed them. Rearranging the original ideas into a more logical order fails because Emma did not just reorder her old vague complaints—she replaced them with a focused claim and new supporting reasons.
Question 5
Chen wrote a personal narrative about getting lost at a museum. His draft has vague details:
Draft: “I walked into a room and felt weird. There were things everywhere. I couldn’t find my class.”
He revises to make the description more specific:
Revised: “I stepped into a dim room filled with towering statues, and my stomach tightened when I realized the voices from my class had faded down the hallway.”
What improvement resulted from Chen’s revision?
- He fixed choppy sentences by combining them into longer, correctly punctuated statements.
- He added concrete sensory details that help the reader picture and feel the scene. (correct answer)
- He built suspense by hinting at the main event without stating what actually happened.
- He varied his writing by shifting the focus toward describing the museum's other visitors.
Explanation: The revised version replaces flat words like “weird” and “things everywhere” with precise, sensory language: a “dim room,” “towering statues,” and a “stomach tightened” as class voices “faded down the hallway.” These details let a reader actually see and feel what Chen experienced, which is exactly what strong revision does—it strengthens description so the moment becomes vivid. That is why the choice about adding concrete sensory details is correct.
The choice about fixing choppy sentences and punctuation describes editing conventions, not the real change here; Chen improved what the reader can picture, not comma or semicolon use. The choice about building suspense is wrong because Chen still tells us clearly what happened—he got separated from his class—so nothing is hidden to create mystery. The choice about shifting focus to the museum's other visitors is also wrong: the revision keeps the exact same moment and setting and never introduces new people or a new topic. Only added sensory detail explains the improvement.
Question 6
Marcus is writing a research paper about the history of video games. He has a draft that is hard to follow because it mixes time periods in the same paragraph:
Draft excerpt: “In the 2000s, online gaming grew fast. In the 1970s, early arcade games became popular. Today, esports fill stadiums. In the 1980s, home consoles changed entertainment.”
Marcus tries to fix it by adding commas, but it still feels confusing. What should Marcus do next to strengthen the writing?
- Revise the excerpt by reordering the sentences into chronological order and adding transitions between the time periods. (correct answer)
- Edit the excerpt by replacing “grew fast” with “grew quickly” and fixing any spelling, but keep the current order of the sentences.
- Add a topic sentence at the start of the paragraph that lists all four time periods, but leave the sentences in their current order.
- Combine the four sentences into one long sentence using semicolons so the ideas feel more connected to the reader.
Explanation: The real problem is organization: the paragraph jumps from the 2000s to the 1970s to today to the 1980s, so readers get lost. To strengthen this writing, Marcus needs to reorder the sentences into chronological order (1970s, 1980s, 2000s, today) and add transitions so readers can follow the timeline. That is exactly what the correct answer does.
Replacing “grew fast” with “grew quickly” is a word-level edit; it polishes one phrase but leaves the confusing time order untouched. Adding a topic sentence that lists the time periods might preview the content, but the body sentences still bounce between decades, so the paragraph stays just as hard to follow. Combining everything into one long sentence with semicolons only crowds the mixed-up dates together—it makes the jumbled order worse, not clearer. Only reorganizing and adding transitions fixes the actual organizational problem, so it is the best next step.
Question 7
Sofia is revising a literary analysis paragraph about how a character changes in a novel. Her draft includes a claim but not enough evidence:
Draft: “At the beginning, Lina is selfish, but later she becomes more caring. This shows she grows as a person.”
Sofia wants to revise for development. Which change would best strengthen her paragraph?
- Add a specific scene and quotation showing Lina acting selfishly, then a later scene showing her acting caring. (correct answer)
- Fix the capitalization and add a comma after “beginning” so the sentences follow correct punctuation rules.
- Add another sentence restating that Lina grows as a person so the main idea feels clearer and stronger.
- Replace “This shows” with “I think” and add opinion words so the writing sounds more personal to readers.
Explanation: The draft makes a claim—that Lina changes from selfish to caring—but never proves it. Developing a literary analysis means backing up a claim with concrete proof from the text. Adding a specific scene and quotation of Lina acting selfishly, then a later scene of her acting caring, gives readers actual evidence for the change, so this is the strongest revision.
Fixing capitalization and adding a comma only polishes punctuation; it corrects small conventions but adds no evidence, so the paragraph still lacks support. Adding a sentence that restates that Lina grows just repeats the claim in different words—repeating an idea is not the same as proving it with details from the story. Replacing “This shows” with “I think” and piling on opinion words changes the voice but still gives no textual evidence, and it actually makes the analysis weaker and less convincing. Only adding specific scenes and a quotation develops the paragraph by supporting the claim with real proof.
Question 8
Yuki is planning an argumentative speech about why the cafeteria should offer more vegetarian options. Before drafting, she makes a plan with three reasons and evidence:
Plan notes:
- Reason 1: More students would eat lunch (survey from her class)
- Reason 2: It can cost less (price comparison of beans vs. meat)
- Reason 3: It helps the environment (fact from a science article)
How did Yuki’s planning most likely strengthen her final draft?
- It let her list every fact she found first, so her speech would automatically include the strongest possible argument.
- It gave her an organized structure with evidence ready to support each reason. (correct answer)
- It grouped her reasons in advance, so she could then focus her drafting time on making the sentences sound more advanced.
- It matched each reason to a source, so she knew her ideas were correct and would not need to check them again.
Explanation: The best answer is that planning gave Yuki an organized structure with evidence ready to support each reason. Her notes line up three clear reasons, and each one already has specific support—class survey data, a price comparison, and a science fact—so her first draft starts focused and well supported instead of being just opinions.
The choice about listing every fact is wrong because collecting facts does not 'automatically' create the strongest argument; a writer still has to choose and arrange evidence purposefully. The choice about focusing drafting time on advanced-sounding sentences is wrong because the value of her plan is organization and support, not sentence style—and fancier sentences don't make an argument stronger. The choice about matching reasons to sources so she never needs to check them again is wrong because having a source noted does not prove the idea is correct; good writers still verify and cite their information carefully. Only the keyed answer names what planning actually does: it builds a clear structure with support ready for each point.
Question 9
Jordan is editing for sentence variety in an informative article about space travel.
Before: “Space travel is difficult. Space travel is expensive. Space travel takes training. Space travel can be dangerous.”
Which edit best improves sentence variety while keeping the meaning?
- “Space travel is difficult. It is expensive. Astronauts need training. It can be dangerous, too.”
- “Space travel is difficult, expensive, and dangerous, and it also requires extensive training.” (correct answer)
- “Space travel is difficult, and it is expensive, and it takes training, and it can be dangerous.”
- “Space travel is difficult and expensive, but it is also dangerous and requires a lot of training.”
Explanation: Jordan's draft repeats the same subject-verb pattern four times, which makes the writing sound choppy and monotonous. The best fix combines all four ideas into one smooth sentence that groups the shared descriptions (difficult, expensive, dangerous) and then adds the training point—this varies the structure while keeping every detail. The choice that only swaps in pronouns and shifts the subject still leaves four short, choppy sentences with almost no variety. The choice that strings everything together with repeated 'and' creates one long, monotonous run-on that just replaces repeated periods with a repeated word. The choice that uses 'but' changes the meaning by suggesting that being dangerous contrasts with being difficult and expensive, when the original simply lists these traits together. Only the keyed answer improves variety and keeps the meaning intact.
Question 10
Jamal is revising a paragraph from an informative report about earthquakes.
Draft: “Earthquakes are very dangerous. They can hurt people and damage buildings. Many places have earthquakes.”
Revision: “Earthquakes can be dangerous because shifting tectonic plates release energy that shakes the ground. In 2010, a magnitude 7.0 earthquake in Haiti caused widespread building collapse and thousands of injuries. Areas near plate boundaries, such as Japan and Chile, experience earthquakes more often.”
What improvement resulted from Jamal’s revision?
- He mostly corrected capitalization and commas so the paragraph would follow the rules more closely.
- He added specific facts and examples that develop the main idea more clearly. (correct answer)
- He shortened each sentence so the paragraph would sound more mysterious and hold reader interest.
- He swapped several everyday words for fancier synonyms without changing what the paragraph says.
Explanation: The revision is stronger because it turns vague statements into precise, supported ones. Jamal explains why earthquakes are dangerous (shifting tectonic plates), gives a real example (the 2010 magnitude 7.0 quake in Haiti), and names places where quakes are common (Japan and Chile). Adding these facts and examples develops the main idea more clearly—that is what revising does.
The choice about correcting capitalization and commas describes editing, which fixes surface conventions rather than adding content or clarity. The choice about shortening sentences to sound mysterious is wrong because an informative report aims to be clear, not mysterious, and Jamal actually added detail. The choice about swapping words for fancier synonyms also describes small editing changes, not the deeper development of ideas you see here. Only adding specific facts and examples explains the real improvement.
Question 11
Amir wrote a research paper paragraph and then edited it.
Before editing: “The scientist’s discovery were important, because it change how doctors treat disease’s.”
After editing: “The scientist’s discovery was important because it changed how doctors treat diseases.”
How did Amir’s editing strengthen the writing?
- It added new research and a stronger claim to the paragraph.
- It corrected grammar and word forms, improving sentence-level accuracy. (correct answer)
- It reorganized the entire paper into a different structure with new headings.
- It made the sentence less clear by removing needed words and ideas.
Explanation: This question tests W.7.5—develop and strengthen writing through planning, revising, editing, rewriting, trying new approach. Writing process STRENGTHENS through: PLANNING (before drafting: brainstorm, outline, graphic organizer, list evidence/details, clarify purpose/audience—organization clearer, sufficient support, focused, appropriate to task), REVISING (big picture content/organization/clarity: add evidence/details/examples, reorder for logic, group related info, add transitions, replace vague with precise, cut tangents, connect ideas, focus—makes writing stronger/clearer/more coherent), EDITING (sentence-level conventions: correct grammar, fix punctuation/spelling, vary sentences, tighten language—polishes and improves readability), REWRITING (start over when needed—completely reorganize, new focus, appropriate structure). Amir made sentence-level corrections: subject-verb agreement (discovery was), verb tense (change to changed), apostrophe errors (disease's to diseases), and unnecessary comma—these are editing changes that polish grammar and conventions. Choice B correctly identifies that editing corrected grammar and word forms, improving sentence-level accuracy. Choices A, C, and D fail because: A describes revision (adding research/claims) not editing, C describes major reorganization not minor corrections, D claims editing made writing less clear when it actually improved clarity. Teachers should distinguish editing from revision, provide grammar checklists, and teach students to proofread for specific error types. Editing focuses on correctness and polish after content revision is complete.
Question 12
Emma is writing an argument essay about whether students should be allowed to use phones during lunch. She first made a quick outline: (1) claim, (2) two reasons with examples, (3) address one counterclaim, (4) conclusion. When Emma drafted, her paragraphs followed that order and each reason had an example. How did Emma’s planning strengthen her writing most?
- It improved her organization and helped her include supporting details for each reason. (correct answer)
- It let her polish her word choice and sentence variety before she began writing her draft.
- It guaranteed her essay was long enough by prompting her to repeat each reason in several paragraphs.
- It let her skip the revising step because a careful outline makes the first draft final.
Explanation: The correct answer is that the outline improved Emma's organization and helped her include supporting details. Planning before drafting is exactly what an outline does: it maps out the claim, reasons with examples, counterclaim, and conclusion, so her paragraphs follow a clear order and each reason has support. The choice about polishing word choice and sentence variety describes editing, which happens at the sentence level during a later stage—an outline can't do that before any sentences exist. The choice about repeating each reason across several paragraphs treats repetition as a benefit, but repeating the same point makes an argument weaker and less focused, not stronger. The choice about skipping revising is wrong because planning creates a solid foundation for the draft; it never replaces revising, and even a well-planned first draft still needs review and improvement. Only one option names what planning actually accomplishes: clearer structure and enough support for each idea.
Question 13
Keisha is revising a paragraph for coherence in an essay about community gardens.
Draft: “Community gardens help neighborhoods. Some people like to cook. Gardens can provide fresh vegetables. There are also many kinds of soil. Neighbors can meet each other.”
Which revision best strengthens coherence by connecting ideas and removing tangents?
- “Community gardens help neighborhoods by providing fresh vegetables and bringing neighbors together. For example, gardeners often share produce and talk while they work, which builds community.” (correct answer)
- “Community gardens help neighborhoods. Some people like to cook their own meals. There are also many kinds of soil, and each one drains water differently in the garden.”
- “Community gardens help neighborhoods in many ways. People come together in these gardens, and gardens are good places that neighbors enjoy visiting all the time.”
- “Community gardens help neighborhoods. Gardens provide fresh vegetables. Gardens provide space to grow food. Gardens provide vegetables that families can eat and enjoy.”
Explanation: The best revision groups related ideas—fresh vegetables and neighbors coming together—and connects them with a linking phrase and a specific example about sharing produce and talking while gardening. It also drops the unrelated details about cooking and soil, so every sentence supports one clear point.
The choice that mentions cooking meals and how soil drains water keeps the same off-topic tangents from the draft, so it never fixes the coherence problem. The choice about gardens being good places neighbors enjoy visiting sounds smoother, but it stays vague and repeats the general idea without adding any concrete detail or clear connection between points. The choice listing what gardens provide circles back to the same idea about vegetables in slightly different words, which is repetition rather than a logical flow of connected ideas. Only the first revision truly links ideas and cuts the tangents, so it is the strongest answer.
Question 14
Maya wrote an informative paragraph about plastic pollution. Her teacher’s comment says: “Your ideas repeat, and one sentence goes off topic.” Here is Maya’s draft:
Draft: “Plastic pollution is a big problem in oceans. Plastic pollution hurts animals. I saw a video about a dolphin. Plastic pollution lasts a long time. Plastic pollution is everywhere.”
What revision would best strengthen Maya’s paragraph based on the feedback?
- Remove the off-topic sentence about the video and combine the repeated ideas into one clearer sentence. (correct answer)
- Begin every sentence with the phrase “plastic pollution” so the paragraph keeps one strong, obvious focus throughout.
- Correct any spelling and punctuation errors and keep all of the original sentences so her personal voice stays the same.
- Add two more detailed sentences describing the dolphin video so readers learn more about that memorable example.
Explanation: The teacher named two problems: repeated ideas and one sentence that wanders off topic. The best revision fixes both at once by cutting the video sentence, which does not connect to the effects of plastic pollution, and merging the sentences that keep restating the same idea into one clearer sentence. Beginning every sentence with the same phrase does not help—it makes the repetition worse instead of solving it. Only fixing spelling and punctuation polishes small errors but ignores the teacher's real feedback about repetition and focus, so the paragraph stays weak. Adding more sentences about the dolphin video expands the very part that is off topic, pulling the paragraph further from its main idea about plastic pollution. Because only one choice removes the tangent and tightens the repeated ideas, it is the single best answer.
Question 15
Carlos started an informative report about the water cycle without planning. After two pages, his draft includes a story about his last swim, repeats “evaporation” in several sections, and never explains condensation. What should Carlos do next to strengthen his writing most?
- Create a brief outline of the key stages, then revise by removing the off-topic story and adding the missing explanations. (correct answer)
- Read through carefully and fix any spelling or punctuation errors first, since a polished, error-free draft is what makes an informative report strong and clear.
- Expand the swim story into a lively introduction so readers stay interested, then briefly mention the remaining stages of the water cycle near the end.
- Keep drafting new pages while ideas are flowing, then organize everything into a logical order once the report is completely finished.
Explanation: The report has three big-picture problems: an off-topic story, repeated ideas, and a missing stage (condensation). The best next step is to plan the key stages with a quick outline, then revise to cut what does not belong and add what is missing. This fixes the actual content and organization issues the draft has. Fixing spelling and punctuation first only polishes the sentences; it never removes the tangent or adds the missing explanation, so the report stays incomplete and disorganized. Expanding the swim story adds even more off-topic material to an already unfocused informative report, and pushing the water-cycle stages to a brief mention at the end leaves the science thin—the opposite of what an informative report needs. Waiting to organize until the very end lets the draft grow more tangled and repetitive, forcing a much bigger cleanup later; a short plan now guides complete, focused coverage. Only outlining and then revising for content targets the real weaknesses in this draft.
Question 16
Chen is drafting a literary analysis about how a character changes in a novel. His first body paragraph says:
Draft: “The character becomes better. This shows growth. There are many examples.”
Which revision would best strengthen Chen’s paragraph for development and clarity?
- Add a specific scene from the novel and explain how the character’s actions in that scene show change over time. (correct answer)
- Replace the vague word “better” with three colorful adjectives so the character sounds more interesting to readers.
- Add a formal opening sentence that restates the assignment prompt so the paragraph looks more polished and organized.
- Move the sentence “There are many examples” to the top so the paragraph announces its main point right away.
Explanation: The strongest revision adds a specific scene and explains how the character’s actions in it show change—this gives the paragraph the concrete evidence and analysis it is missing, which is what real development means. Right now every sentence is vague, so the reader never sees proof of growth.
Swapping in colorful adjectives only decorates the same empty claim; the paragraph still has no scene, no example, and no explanation, so it stays undeveloped. Adding a formal sentence that restates the prompt makes the paragraph look neater but adds no evidence or analysis—appearance is not development. Moving “There are many examples” to the top just reorders vague statements; it still promises examples without ever giving one. Only adding a real scene and explaining it strengthens both development and clarity.
Question 17
Amir is editing the final draft of an argument essay. He is focusing on conventions (grammar and punctuation). Here is one sentence from his draft:
Draft sentence: “If the city add more bike lanes, people rides safer and traffic decrease.”
Which edited sentence best strengthens the writing by correcting grammar while keeping the meaning the same?
- “If the city add more bike lanes, people will ride safer and traffic will decrease.”
- “If the city adds more bike lanes, people will ride more safely, and traffic will decrease.” (correct answer)
- “If the city adds more bike lanes, bike lanes are safer and traffic gets better everywhere.”
- “If the city adds more bike lanes, people rides safer, and the traffic decreased a lot.”
Explanation: The best edit fixes every grammar problem while keeping Amir's original meaning: the subject and verb agree in “the city adds,” the verb phrase “people will ride more safely” uses an adverb correctly, and the verbs stay in the same future tense with a comma joining the two independent clauses. One choice corrects only some errors—it fixes the verb tense but leaves the subject-verb error in “city add” and uses the adjective “safer” where the adverb “more safely” is needed. Another choice fixes “city adds” but changes the meaning: it says the bike lanes themselves are safer instead of the people, and “traffic gets better everywhere” adds an idea that was not in the original. The last choice keeps the agreement error in “people rides” and mixes tenses by jumping from present to past in “traffic decreased,” so it reads inconsistently. Only one option repairs all the conventions without changing what Amir was trying to say.
Question 18
Maya wrote an argument essay draft about requiring uniforms. Her teacher says: “Your reasons are strong, but your second and third paragraphs repeat the same idea. Combine them and add a transition to your counterclaim.” Maya makes only these changes: she fixes spelling, changes “a lot” to “many,” and adds a comma in one sentence. Which statement best evaluates Maya’s process?
- Maya revised well because fixing spelling and word choice takes care of the repetition and organization problems her teacher mentioned.
- Maya edited a few words, but she did not revise the content and organization issues her teacher pointed out. (correct answer)
- Maya started revising because combining paragraphs and adding a transition begins with tightening the small wording details first.
- Maya addressed the feedback because reducing repeated ideas mostly means cutting extra words and cleaning up punctuation.
Explanation: The teacher pointed out two big-picture problems: two paragraphs repeat the same idea, and a transition is missing before the counterclaim. Fixing those requires revising—combining paragraphs and adding a transition sentence. Maya only made surface changes: correcting spelling, swapping one word, and adding a comma. Those are editing moves, not revision, so the best evaluation is that she edited a few words but did not revise the content and organization issues her teacher named. The choice claiming she revised well is wrong because fixing spelling and word choice does not merge repeated paragraphs or add a transition. The choice saying she 'started revising' by tightening small wording first is wrong because editing tiny details is not the same as reorganizing content, and none of her changes touched the paragraphs. The choice claiming she addressed the feedback by cutting extra words and cleaning up punctuation is wrong because reducing repeated ideas means combining and reordering whole paragraphs, not just trimming words. Only one option correctly separates editing from the revision the feedback required.
Question 19
Carlos wrote a draft of a short story for class, but the plot is confusing because the narrator changes from first person to third person without a reason:
Draft excerpt: “I ran to the bus stop, but he was already late. Then I looked at my watch and she sighed.”
Carlos wants to strengthen clarity. Which revision best addresses the problem?
- Keep the shifting narration but add vivid adjectives so the sentences feel more detailed and exciting.
- Choose one point of view and rewrite the excerpt so the pronouns and narration stay consistent throughout. (correct answer)
- Fix the small grammar and punctuation errors in the sentences so the excerpt reads more smoothly.
- Add transition words between the sentences so the actions connect more clearly for the reader.
Explanation: The real problem is that the narrator keeps switching between first person ("I") and third person ("he" and "she") for no clear reason, so readers cannot tell who is speaking. The best fix is to choose one point of view and rewrite so the pronouns and narration stay consistent throughout—this is a revision that clears up the confusing perspective. Adding vivid adjectives so the sentences feel more detailed keeps the confusing shifts in place, so the point of view stays just as unclear. Fixing small grammar and punctuation errors is only surface editing; even polished sentences would still jump between "I" and "she." Adding transition words helps show how actions connect, but the reader would still be lost about who the narrator is. Only choosing and keeping one perspective solves the actual clarity problem in Carlos's draft.