A student wrote: 'The scientist conducted experiments. The experiments were important. The experiments helped prove the theory.' Which revision strategy would most effectively improve the flow and sophistication of this writing?
- Add more descriptive adjectives to make each sentence longer and more detailed.
- Use subordinating conjunctions and relative pronouns to create complex sentence structures. (correct answer)
- Change all sentences to questions to make the writing more engaging for readers.
- Replace simple words with more advanced vocabulary while keeping the same sentence structure.
Explanation: Using subordinating conjunctions and relative pronouns would allow the student to combine the repetitive sentences into more sophisticated structures like 'The scientist conducted important experiments that helped prove the theory.' This eliminates redundancy and creates better flow. Choice A would make the writing wordy without addressing the choppy structure. Choice C would inappropriately change the purpose and tone of the writing. Choice D focuses only on vocabulary without addressing the structural issues that make the writing repetitive and choppy.